Kia ora and welcome back this week for witing we are doing a persuasive text. We had to choose a topic off a doc and I chose that we should not have sweets everyday. I wrote about not having sweets everyday because it there is a downside to it. here is a demonstration say that I wanted to make it so nobody littered I would have to do a persuasive text to the government. but there would have to be lots of persuasion and good writing. but I hope you enjoy.
You should not have sweets every day.
You should not have sweets every day because then you will be very unhealthy.
Lots of sweets contain artificial flavors,colors and sugar. Artificial anything is not good for your body. Your body doesn't really understand anything artificial. You can even get cavities from too much sugar.
You might get sick from eating too many sweets but you can have them once or twice a week. I know as kids we love sweets but it's not the best for us. Adding it to a balanced diet is the best idea.
Kia Ora Saffy, I like how you have listed many good reasons about why nobody should eat junk food and I description also liked how you wrote a description good at the start. Next time try to space out the writing so that it is easer to read because right now it is hard to read, and remember to proof read before posting a blog post. But other than that this is amazing! Keep up the good work!
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